Glossary entry (derived from question below)
Chinese term or phrase:
面色苍白、人瘦毛长、目光呆滞、怪僻不群的
English translation:
pale, skinny, dull eyed teenagers
Added to glossary by
Bea Geenen
Jan 20, 2012 09:16
12 yrs ago
Chinese term
Translator and voiceover actress from HK
Native in: Chinese (Variants: Sichuanese , Mandarin, Traditional, Cantonese, Simplified) 
Works in: Chinese to English, English to Chinese, Chinese
面色苍白、人瘦毛长、目光呆滞、怪僻不群的
Chinese to English
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著名作家韩少功先生对“山里少年”是这样描述的：“凡精神爽朗、生活充实、实干能力强、人际关系好的乡村青年，大都是低学历的。”“如果你在这里看见面色苍白、人瘦毛长、目光呆滞、怪僻不群的青年，……他们衣冠楚楚从不出现在田边地头，你就大致可以猜出他们的身分，大多是大、中专毕业的乡村知识分子。”
I tried to translate this literally, but it sounds really awkward in English. I hope someone can help me make the translation sound more natural in English. Thank you!
I tried to translate this literally, but it sounds really awkward in English. I hope someone can help me make the translation sound more natural in English. Thank you!
Proposed translations
(English)
| 3 | pale, skinny, dull eyed teenagers |
Bea Geenen
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| 4 | 请见下文详解 |
Fang Huang
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| 4 | pale, skinny, long-haired, dull-eyed, weird, teenage loners |
Simon Haigh
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| 3 | 试译 |
Chun Un
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Change log
Jan 27, 2012 07:06: Bea Geenen Created KOG entry
Proposed translations
1 day 7 hrs
Bea Geenen
Chinese/English/Spanish/German/French
Native in: Dutch 
Works in: Chinese to Dutch, English to Dutch, Spanish to Dutch, and 2 more.
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pale, skinny, dull eyed teenagers
"If you see some pale, skinny, dull eyed teenagers that don’t seem to fit in with the crowds around here.. and whose neat clothing is not the typical farmer’s garb, chances are that they’re college or university graduated countryside intellectuals."
OR if you want a more natural soundig translation, you could say:
"...... chances are that they are kids born and raised in the country side but with a college or university degree in their pockets."
OR if you want a more natural soundig translation, you could say:
"...... chances are that they are kids born and raised in the country side but with a college or university degree in their pockets."
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Fang Huang
Switzerland
Switzerland
Native in Chinese
Switzerland
English to Chinese Mandarin translator
Native in: Chinese (Variant: Mandarin)
Works in: English to Chinese
请见下文详解
如果你在这里看见面色苍白、人瘦毛长、目光呆滞、怪僻不群的青年，……
请看是不是可这样翻译：
If you see young skinny guys around here who are with pale faces, long hair, dull and sullen eyes and who, indulged their own customary strange manners, never care to blend in with other people, …..
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Note added at 4 hrs (2012-01-20 14:11:35 GMT)
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rewriting it because the word "in" was lost earlier. SO here it is:
If you see young skinny guys around here who are with pale faces, long hair, dull and sullen eyes and who, indulged in their own customary strange manners, never care to blend in with other people, …..
请看是不是可这样翻译：
If you see young skinny guys around here who are with pale faces, long hair, dull and sullen eyes and who, indulged their own customary strange manners, never care to blend in with other people, …..
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Note added at 4 hrs (2012-01-20 14:11:35 GMT)
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rewriting it because the word "in" was lost earlier. SO here it is:
If you see young skinny guys around here who are with pale faces, long hair, dull and sullen eyes and who, indulged in their own customary strange manners, never care to blend in with other people, …..
7 hrs
试译
If you ever come across a skinny- and pale-looking youth with sullen eyes, sporting long hair, and who, with his idiosyncrasies, can't care less to blend in...
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Note added at 7 hrs (2012-01-20 16:21:55 GMT)
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This was based on Lilany's version.
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Note added at 7 hrs (2012-01-20 16:32:48 GMT)
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On a second thought, 'dull' is better than 'sullen' here.
If you ever come across a skinny- and pale-looking youth with dull eyes, sporting long hair, and who, with his idiosyncrasies, can't care less to blend in...
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Note added at 7 hrs (2012-01-20 16:21:55 GMT)
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This was based on Lilany's version.
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Note added at 7 hrs (2012-01-20 16:32:48 GMT)
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On a second thought, 'dull' is better than 'sullen' here.
If you ever come across a skinny- and pale-looking youth with dull eyes, sporting long hair, and who, with his idiosyncrasies, can't care less to blend in...
5 days
pale, skinny, long-haired, dull-eyed, weird, teenage loners
if you see some .......
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